Topic started by shrii (@ 202.184.25.6) on Mon Dec 23 03:41:49 .
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kovilukku chendren-anggu
bakthiyai kaanamudiyavillai,
pallikkuc chendren-anggu
kalviyai kaanamudiyavillai,
iyarkaiyai rasikkalaam endru ninaithen-anggu
seyarkaiyai maddhumae kaanabathaayithru,
athu maddummaa?
manithanai kandaalum-anggu
manitha neyatthai kaanamudiyavillai,
ithu thaan ini naam kadanthu chella virukkum ulagamaa?
pathil thedugiren kidaitha paadillai!!!

Responses:

• From: shrii (@ 202.184.25.6) on: Mon Dec 23 03:44:10
  
  namashkar! this is my 1st trial.
  hope u can give ur comments bout this chinna kirukkal.
  tavarugal irunthaal manikke vendukiren!
  nandrigal pala.
  
  
• From: Suggestor (@ 66.233.98.183) on: Sat Jan 4 02:58:32
  
  Hi Shri .,
  
  Some of my suggestions
  1.It is not a rule that every sentence of ur poem should end with a same word or ethukai word.
  2.It should not be stereotyped or like a cliche.
  3.It is not necessary that it should flow like a river or falls,it can also be like a rough surface.for example vaali's poems are like flowing whereas vairamuthu's is like later type.
  4.Do read some quality kavithaigal.-(not of varamalar type)
  that is it now.
  
  
• From: shrii (@ 202.184.25.6) on: Mon Jan 6 23:15:29
  
  10x 4 ur advise.
  
  
• From: Govin (@ 203.129.195.100) on: Sat Jan 11 03:08:58
  
  Urainadaiyil oru Pulambal
  
  

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