Death bed
Topic started by Shakthi (@ bangdp-34-109.mantraonline.com) on Fri Jun 28 08:11:22 .
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Near & Dears surrounded,
Minutes numbered,
There I lay,
leaving others to
contemplate on my consciousness.
I search for your face,
to find your lifeless gaze
competing with mine.
I had nurtured meaningless affection
for worthless people.
You meant the most,
Alas! I chose not to disclose.
My senses are getting dim, yet
adamantly I try to convey my unsaid love.
You cared for my needs
I need to tell u
I cared for urs.
I try to communicate in pain
My efforts going vain
Finally my hand reaches yours,
I sqeeze you hard.
I squeeze to pour all my strength
to pour the thick essense of quietened love.
A final heart gripping squeeze.
I see ur eyes welling
Intuition says I did my job
Unexplainable sate fills me
And then the inevitable
Sight dimmed
Hearing failed,
Senses diminished.
There was nothing.
Darkness, for a second, a minute, or more..
I found myself totally blissful,
Light because I had shed my body,
Bright because I am mingled with nature.
I look down to see the mortal remains
And i find urs next to mine.
You have followed
my every word,
my every order,
my every thought,
Now, you have followed me.
Welcome, my love,
Come and embrace me
No more duality
We have become a single entity.
Responses:
- From: Iyappan (@ lan-202-144-73-10.maa.sify.net)
on: Fri Jun 28 10:47:11
shakthi..
Sad story .. but good one one..
Iyappan
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-34-103.mantraonline.com)
on: Fri Jun 28 13:53:35
thx
- From: FlowerGuy (@ 202.95.127.5)
on: Wed Jul 3 13:33:01
sollapadum kaadhal anaithum,sorkkathil seruvathillai.
sollaatha kaadhal silathum,sorkkathil seruvathundu.
agreeing shakthi? :-) :-)
well..'deathbed' is a great poem & it'll haunt me forever.
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-33-17.mantraonline.com)
on: Wed Jul 3 14:12:58
Flower guy,
Agreed! I support u too!
:)
thx flowerguy
Hope its not scary enough to haunt lol
just jokin
- From: kurankaatti (@ spxychi1.bankofamerica.com)
on: Wed Jul 3 16:16:44
Good one, Shakthi.
andha kavithaiyin kathaa(nayakan/nayaki)aaka ennaiyE ninaiththup patiththEn.
muthalil sokam patarnthathu,
pin vizhuntha aananthaka kaNNeeraal
nenjam nekizhnthathu.
ithu pOl thunai kitaikka
kotuththuvaikka vEntum.
en 6 jenmankaLai
viRRaavathu ithu pOl
oru jenmamam vaanka vEntum!
-Sridhar
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-35-156.mantraonline.com)
on: Thu Jul 4 02:43:48
thx Mr.Kurankatti
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-35-156.mantraonline.com)
on: Thu Jul 4 02:47:23
I had 2 old couple (definitely Indian couple) in my mind, when I wrote this. Its about husband around 70 years thinkin for his wife...and his love towards her.
In olden days those generation ppl, never showed or believed in outward affection.
Sometime I think THANKGOD i am born now! I mean what is love if its not shown???
But one cant deny the fact, there are lakhs of old couples like this, who were truly and deeply in love with each other, they did not openly say it out, is a different matter.
I remember my Granny (my husband's) died just 2 minutes after my grandad (my husband's) passed away!
Wow! Is that not love?
- From: kurankatti (@ adsl-64-171-4-212.dsl.sntc01.pacbell.net)
on: Thu Jul 4 04:38:56
Yes, that is love.
Have you heared about Barathidhasan Kavithai about love?
"avaL irukiraal enpathE inpam"
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-36-239.mantraonline.com)
on: Thu Jul 4 07:30:49
Mr.Kurankatti,
Love engira vaartaikku,
ivalavu azhagaana explanation naan ketadE illai.
Long live the fame of such poets like bharathidasan etc.
- From: P.Manikandan (@ tipl-10-191-india.temenos.com)
on: Fri Jul 12 07:17:55
Superrrrbbbbbb Shakthi...
Enakku avvalavaa English theriyaathu...
Irunthaalum Superrrbbb
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-35-186.mantraonline.com)
on: Fri Jul 12 14:01:06
haiyo!
thxxxx
- From: "kavitai" (@ cache5-1.ruh.isu.net.sa)
on: Sun Jul 14 04:13:05
Dear Shakthi
Excess bt Success
Enrum anpudam
"kavitai"
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-35-160.mantraonline.com)
on: Sun Jul 14 06:08:09
kavithai,
Should I say ur comment was
short n sweet!
btw, thx.
:)
- From: Skanthavelu Nadarajah (@ edtntnt6-port-170.dial.telus.net)
on: Sat Jul 27 12:02:02
My God, that was the saddest poem I have heard here! ;-(
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-36-253.mantraonline.com)
on: Sat Jul 27 14:03:27
skanthavelu n,
yeah saddest....but happiest in its own way.
They do unite..dont they?
'not even death could snatch us apart..'
so goes the saying....
- From: Skanthavelu Nadarajah (@ edtntnt7-port-199.dial.telus.net)
on: Sat Jul 27 17:08:59
Now that I think about it, it ain't all sad..
You ever heard a song titled "My Heart Will Go On"
or "I Will Always Love You"? Now those are truely sad.
- From: Skanthavelu Nadarajah (@ edtntnt3-port-46.dial.telus.net)
on: Sat Jul 27 22:35:20
Shakthi,
Do you know some scary poems? Meaning, ones so scary that it will scare the veshti/saree off the person reading it? Please post one. I do like a good scare every now and then!
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-36-226.mantraonline.com)
on: Sun Jul 28 05:32:17
Skanthavelu n,
"You ever heard a song titled "My Heart Will Go On" "<<<<<
yeah i have. Good one.
"Do you know some scary poems? "<<<<<
Well i dont know any body's poem which scared me! I have not tried writing myself too! But nice suggestion to give a try!
"Meaning, ones so scary that it will scare the veshti/saree off the person reading it? "<<<<<<
WHAT EXACTLY DO U MEAN? COULD U PLZ EXPLAIN
AND I GUESS NO ONE WEARS SAREES OR VESHTIS THESEDAYS? FOR HEAVEN SAKE!!!
- From: Skanthavelu Nadarajah (@ edtntnt3-port-68.dial.telus.net)
on: Sun Jul 28 08:57:22
That is a funny way of saying to scare the person really good. hehehe... :-)
- From: Skanthavelu Nadarajah (@ edtntnt3-port-69.dial.telus.net)
on: Sun Jul 28 15:18:23
>>>WHAT EXACTLY DO U MEAN?<<<
Uhh Shakthi..
When you type in all capitals, that looks like you are shouting.. :-((( No offenese, okay? :-(
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-34-75.mantraonline.com)
on: Mon Jul 29 01:28:56
lol..
"When you type in all capitals, that looks like you are shouting.. :-((( No offenese, okay? :-("<<<<<
LOL...no I was not shouting!
When I type in caps... I MEAN...
1. I AM stressing my point! or emphasising those words.
2. I am highly unhappy saying these or listenign these...etc
:)
- From: shaggy (@ 202.54.26.118)
on: Mon Jul 29 02:20:15
people i have a question here. how can we differentiate in the love to our different relations. mom, sis, wife, daughter, pal and love (and vice versa for gals). could someone try to take this on...
shaggy
- From: Skanthavelu Nadarajah (@ edtntnt6-port-110.dial.telus.net)
on: Mon Jul 29 08:19:55
Shakti,
I was only pointing it out. Sorry if I offended you with what I said in my last post. Sorry!
- From: ec (@ bryant.rz-berlin.mpg.de)
on: Mon Jul 29 11:56:49
Emotional and nice one Shakti!
- From: Shakthi (@ bangdp-36-202.mantraonline.com)
on: Tue Jul 30 04:07:49
Skanthavelu,
kool! I was not offended at all!
:)
ec,
thx
- From: Skanthavelu Nadarajah (@ edtntnt5-port-126.dial.telus.net)
on: Tue Aug 6 22:33:45
vaNAkkam, Shakthi! eppadi irukiRInga?
Amma vazhga! karuNaiamma vazhga!
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